Thursday, April 26, 2012

The Cover Letter


Dwight Scott

25 April 2012

English 1200-78

Mellisa Tetterton

Revisions on Project One/ Improvement in Writing Skills (Cover Letter)

For Project One a major revision I made was that I added clearly craft main points to the end of my introduction.  Before making revisions my paper was well written, but it lacked a flow because I did not state the main points I was going to talk about in my introduction.  Now that the main points are added to the paper, the paper is organized and easy to follow.  Another major revision made was that I had my thesis in the beginning of my second paragraph and I did not like where it was located in the paper.  Therefore, I moved my thesis into my introduction after my main points because I feel as if it not only fits in that part of the paper but it gives my audience a clear understanding of what I am going to talk about before they begin to read my body paragraphs.  The last major revision I made was going more in depth in most of the points I was trying to make throughout the paper.  For example, on page two I talk about one of my sources author which is Peter Singer and I said that he lacks credibility.  Yes, I made a great observation and noticed he lacked credibility, but did not really go in depth and explain why he lacked credibility.  However, when revising the paper I made sure to explain and go into depth of why he lacked credibility by stating that his audience has no idea where the information is coming from due to the lack of references and sources that Peter did not provide.  

In English 1200 I can say that I have not only learned a lot about writing, but I have also expanded my writing abilities.  This class was a great foundation class, so now when I take writing classes in the future I will be prepared and succeed.   All my life a teacher has never told me not to use contractions, but after taking this class I learned that “would not” is better than “wouldn’t”.  Also, I have always gave basic titles to papers, but this class taught me how to expand my mind and come up with more creative thoughts and titles because not only will it make the paper interesting, but it will catch the eye of the reader.  Last, I learned that when it comes to writing the main objective is to get straight to the point of what you want to talk about or prove rather than beat around the bush.  The reason for this is to cut out the use of unnecessary words and make the paper soar.  Overall, this was a great class and I would recommend it to anyone who wants to improve their writing skills.

The Revised Project


            Dwight Scott

             6 February 2012

            English 1200-78

            Mellisa Tetterton

Want health problems? Easy, smoke cigarettes

Who would have ever known that by taking a plant named tobacco, shredding it, and rolling it into a thin piece of paper would have become one of the most used items in America today?  Every day many will see a cigarette and the smoke produced, possibly taste or smell it, or even step on a cigarette.  Cigarettes contain more than 4000 chemical compounds and at least 400 toxic substances (Macnair).  Everyone in America usually know how harmful a cigarette is, yet they still want to smoke due to the addiction and stress involved in their life.  The mistake for a human being to smoke it is not even worth it because of the potential of the substance to increase cancer, longevity, and various other health related problems.  Smoking is getting worse every day, and killing the quality of life for people that smoke, but is there really a solution to this never ending problem people have gotten themselves into?  Cigarette smoking causes various health problems, is addicting, causes second hand smoke, and a hard to quit. The best solution to this problem is to just ban cigarette smoking in all public places. Smoking cigarettes are an unhealthy habit and is affecting the ones around them that don’t smoke (especially children). 

If a person wants to smoke a cigarette you are to only be allowed to smoke it on your personal land.  Places like clubs, restaurants, and working environments are just not the time or place to have the need to take a cigarette out and smoke it.  Earlier this month, the U.S. Food and Drug Administration announced that it would spend $600 million over five years to educate the public about the dangers of tobacco use (Singer).  Peter Singer is a professor of bioethics at Princeton University and Laureate Professor at the University of Melbourne.  Singer is an informative and persuasive author and through his article tries to let people know that many smokers would not mind the ban of cigarettes due to the fact that it would help them to quit.  He interacts with his audience by using the president Barrack Obama as a prime example because Singer throughout his paper says that smokers would like to see cigarettes banned because like Barrack did, they want to quit.  Therefore, his audience is the people in the U.S trying to quit smoking cigarettes.  His purpose is to persuade people the best solutions to quit smoking, and he does so by providing descriptive detail, and examples.  The author  believe in Peter Singers ethos appeals due to his acknowledgment of higher education and he conducted good research by providing back up points and facts to his views.  The only warrants the author wants his audience to accept that people would find hard is his credibility, because he provides great statistics and information but people have no idea where the information is coming from by lacking sources/references.  The government may not be able to ban the cigarette use completely at first but it can start somewhere, by starting the ban in only public places.

Not only are cigarettes a terrible item to get addicted to but along with the constant smoking comes various types of health related problems, disease, and possibly cancer.  Ninety percent of lung cancer cases are due to smoking (Macnair).  Cardiovascular disease is the main cause of death due to smoking (Macnair).  These statistics and information is why it is easy to see that smoking cigarettes is not worth it due to all of the health problems it will bring to the body.  Dr Patricia Macnair is writing about various health problems that happen when you begin to smoke and helpful tips if you are trying to quit.  Her audience is the society as a whole or anyone interested in health concerns when smoking.  Dr. Macnair’s purpose is to inform the society about smoking health risk so that nobody that reads her article and smokes can say they do not know the health concerns that come with it. She uses a lot of informative description throughout her article and makes it somewhat believable.  The reason it is somewhat believable is because you see all of the information being provided but do not know where the information came from.  Therefore, can you trust it?  Yes, the audience can trust it because she is a doctor and does know what she is talking about, but not knowing where the information is coming from makes it questionable.  The appeal she uses throughout her article is logos because she uses logic to reason her claim and her reasoning includes many facts and statistics.  The reason a cigarette is able to cause so much damage is due to the material inside of it.  A cigarette contains nicotine, carbon monoxide, tar, and gas.  Not only due these bad chemicals in your body cause disease and cancer, but will also give you bad breathe, asthma, high blood pressure, and sickness.  Is small buzz (pleasure) from a cigarette worth the many health issues that comes along with it?  It’s also popular for women that are pregnant to smoke cigarettes because they are so addicted to it they can not get off of it, and this leads to babies dying or being born with health/mental issues.  “Smokers who are trying to kick their habit may be disappointed to find there's no single quit method that guarantees success” (Macnair).  Although you may have started your bad smoking habits it is not too late to still get your health back and the best way to do this is to quit smoking cigarettes in general. 

            Because there is no exact way to quit or any procedure to follow, quitting smoking is a hard task to accomplish.  Smoking bans will have positive help on smokers trying to reduce the amount of cigarettes they smoke because it limits their time to do it.  For example, if John is trying to quit smoking cigarettes the best thing for him is to get his mind off of the idea of smoking.  That way he is prone hopefully not to smoke as much.  Well, if every time he is not home he knows he is not able to smoke because he is not allowed, then hopefully it will lead him to forget about the whole smoking idea.  Yes he will be able to still smoke at his house but we must hope that he will decrease his intake at home and be able to just completely get off of it.  This method will not only help the health of the public from dangerous hazards, but it should also be able to save many lives!  The biggest problem with smoking cigarettes and trying to quit is the nicotine in the cigarette.  Nicotine is highly addictive and very hard to get off of once it gets inside ones body and brain.  The feeling and it leaves and the temporary escape it provides leaves people craving for more and more cigarettes.  For instance, let us say David has had a hard day in school filled with test and he is stressed out with a headache because he does not know how well he did on the test.  David then remembers he has a pack of cigarettes in his back pocket, so he takes them out and smokes two.  After smoking he realizes the headache is gone and he is now stress free thanks to the help of some cigarettes.  This is the addictive problem most people who smoke Americans face each and every day, and this has to stop.

            Second hand smoke affects the health of the public yet; the government wants to ignore the situation, instead of taking the necessary steps to solve it.  Secondhand smoke is a toxic cocktail consisting of poisons and carcinogens. There are over 4000 chemical compounds in secondhand smoke; 200 of which are known to be poisonous, and upwards of 60 have been identified as carcinogens (Martin).  Terry Martin the author of this specific article smoked for 26 years, and is now relieved of the addiction.  She knows a great deal about smoking and the struggle it takes to quit.  Terry specifically writes about the effects of second hand smoke on an individuals health and her life experiences influenced her to write about this topic.  Her purpose is to show people how bad the cigarette really is and that they should quit as soon as possible.  Her goal is to open society’s eyes about second hand smoking, and she does a good job doing this.  She also uses logos for her credibility because it is logical and uses persuasive reason to back up her claim.  An example of her use of logos is “Heart disease mortality – an estimated 35, 000 to 62, 000 deaths are caused from heart disease in people who are not current smokers, but who are exposed to ETS” and this use of logos shows how logical/statistical her article is.  The author is not writing toward a specific person or group, but rather the society as a whole.  Martin’s article was reviewed by a medical review board and the details provided in the article do not seem unbelievable in any way.  About half of the smoke is inhaled when your smoking and the other half is exhaled out into the environment for anyone else to capture and absorb.  Adults and children that inhale that second hand smoke are subjected to receive cancer, heart issues, and other health problems.  By having smokers only smoke at their private property and not in public places, this will help the people in public that hate smoking.  For instance, some people are totally against the idea of smoking and damn sure do not want it being blown in their face.  Why have your nonsmokers inhale secondhand smoke and experience the same health risk a smoker faces?  Therefore, the government needs to step up in this situation because it is going to take more than just telling smokers they can not smoke in public.  For this reason, the government needs to create some type of a fine or punishment for people still willing to smoke in public.  That way, smokers will feel more pressure not to smoke and the people that smoke anyways are going to have to pay a price.  Now one might think this seems easy but how could this statement be regulated?  The police can regulate cigarettes the same way they regulate marijuana now, except being caught with a cigarette will of course be less of a punishment.  If this all works out the right way we should be able to eliminate the number of active cigarette smokers due to the fact that they will have to pay a price/fine if caught smoking it.

            Let us say the sales of cigarettes really go down now because the public does not have the urge to go buy tobacco they are only able to smoke at their house.  What are the tobacco companies now supposed to do?  They were making all of this money off of tobacco plants but now less money is being brought in.  Tobacco companies should then move away from the harmful plant tobacco and move toward a medical and beneficial plant named cannabis.  This does not mean that marijuana will now be legal and sold to the public in every store so that the access is easy.  I say America can do this, have medical marijuana clinic centers set up throughout the U.S in the major cities.  Not everyone will be able to go to these clinics because first a person of age 16 or up must visit a doctor and get recommendation that they are now allowed to smoke the cannabis plant.  The doctor will ask the patient various questions in order to see if that patient is capable for the drug, and then they will receive a card registered for them only that will allow them to buy cannabis at clinics around the U.S.  The doctor should be looking for people that have either medical conditions or a previous background of tobacco smoking.  Therefore, this whole process will have the tobacco smokers now transfer over to a less harmful plant and get them off of the addiction of nicotine.  Some individuals may ask what makes smoking marijuana so much better than cigarettes.  Well, not one case of lung cancer has been linked to marijuana usage.  Better yet not one case of death has been linked to marijuana usage.  Marijuana smokers do not smoke anywhere near the amount cigarette smokers do.  Marijuana does not contain the tar or nicotine that a cigarette holds, therefore it’s not addictive.  Marijuana contains THC (dilator) that opens up your lungs and clears it off smoke and dirt, whereas nicotine does the opposite.  Cannabis is easy to grow and reproduce and could be just as easily harvested by the government as the plant tobacco was.  So why does our government feel the need to put the hazardous plant on our shelves, but keep the medically used plant cannabis scarce and illegal.  It just does not make sense.  Even very heavy, long-term marijuana users who had smoked more than 22,000 joints over a lifetime seemed to have no greater risk than infrequent marijuana users or nonusers (Boyles).  While two-pack-a-day or more cigarette smokers were found to have a 20-fold increase in lung cancer risk, no elevation in risk was seen for even the very heaviest marijuana smokers (Boyles).  Salynn Boyles is the author of the website and is informing her audience about the fact that marijuana does not lead to lung cancer.  She interacts with her audience by providing realistic examples that happen in life so that her audience should find it easier to relate to the topic.  Boyle’s purpose is to let her audience know that marijuana is not as bad of a drug as the government puts it as.  She is able to back up her purpose by providing a lot of statistics and descriptive information.  An example of a statistic being used would be, “The heaviest marijuana users in the study had smoke more than 22, 000 joints, while moderated heavy smokers had smoked between 11, 000 and 22,000 joints.”  She is writing to people who smoke marijuana or cigarettes, people interested in the topic, the people against marijuana, and certain people in the government that would deal with this issue.  She speaks with a biased tone due to the fact that she leans toward marijuana over cigarettes and is accurate when doing so.  This author does a good job showing ethos by providing various references, therefore the readers are able to see exactly where she is getting her information from.  Also, she has her article reviewed by a respected person named Dr. Louise Chang who made her article even more credible.  Overall, she is asking society to basically take a step back and take a different perspective on the drug marijuana than we had before, and that we look at nicotine and cigarettes as more harmful.  Boyles is specifically speaking to a certain sector and that sector is people who think cigarettes are better for you than marijuana is.  All of the implications the author provides makes it acceptable and believable due to the credibility she was able to provide.  Lastly, the process/method works and there’s no smoking in public places and the U.S is making an overall move away from the tobacco plant and toward the cannabis plant.  Not only would our overall health be better but also the country would see more civil rest with the intake of cannabis.  When smoking cannabis one does not want to fight or argue.  All you want to do is enjoy life, laugh, have fun, peace, and love one another. 

Our army was smoking weed and didn’t feel like fighting, therefore President Roosevelt in 1937 made it illegal so that our troops did feel like picking up a gun and feel like fighting for our country.  Is that the way it should really be?

If we all know that cigarette is a poison, why should we ever allow this menace to exist in our country? A person smoking in public is a very bad influence on younger people. The more young people are exposed to smoking the better the chance they will become smokers themselves.  Not only is it a bad influence but the second hand smoke in public places is a terrible thought, because your giving the non smokers around you the same effect a normal smoker would receive.  Heart disease, cancer, high blood pressure, and various other health problems, is this what a person wants to feed the public bodies with?  However, by placing a ban on smoking in public places will help the health of our public and hopefully eliminate the number of cigarettes a smoker smokes in a day.  Not only would a ban on smoking places be great, but also the government making a move away from tobacco plants towards cannabis plans would be a great idea.  Nicotine and tar in cigarettes and the health problems they provide, far exceeds the health problems for marijuana.  Therefore this would save many lives and make the world more peaceful.  People would receive a card from a doctor so that way they would be able to visit a marijuana clinic and receive weed to smoke.  By doing so we could get our Americans off of the harmful cigarettes and onto a drug that was purposely made for medical reasons.  So what are we waiting for?  Make this country a better place and stop smoking deathly cigarettes!










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